Dear John and friends,

thanks again. The sentences you give are really more fluent. I have
either altered the original sentences, or included them as
alternatives. I am also considering people learning Pali and without
a strong English background, so I retain some of the technically
correct sentences for comparison sake. The updated page is available
here:

http://www.tipitaka.net/pali/palidd/paliload.php?page=d12

metta,
Yong Peng.

--- In Pali@yahoogroups.com, John Kelly wrote:

I have some suggested amendments for your solutions for Narada
Exercise 12-A. These are all related to making the English more
fluent to the ear of a native English speaker.